Wednesday, September 14, 2016

on a glourious day

My beautiful gorgeous daughters you need to get ready for school said dad. ‘OK’ we will said his glorious daughters let's have our breakfast first my daughters what would you like you like for breakfast my two younger girls. We would like a desert blease dad what kind of dessert chocolate muffins blease dad ok here you go thank you dad this is delicious. so the two younger sisters went off to school as they were walking along the dad said be careful out there it is dangerous so look after each other see you after school .

1 comment:

  1. Dizah, I like that you have tried to use dialogue in your story but your speech marks are in the wrong place. It should be like this - "My beautiful gorgeous daughters you need to get ready for school" said dad. ‘OK, we will" said his daughters.
    Remember to put your speech marks at the beginning of when the person is talking, and at the end of their talking.

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